Motat trip

This year all the year four went to motat and have heeps of fun. first we went on a bus and we had morning tea after morning tea we went with our groups. first we went to see the houses to look for the adic then we saw a church. we sat on some seats then we saw olden day thing like cameras,phones and stuff on the olden day.We saw the phones and we saw how the train works we felt some coal. then we had lunch then we saw some old stuff then we went on the bus all the way to school then we went home

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Look at your blog post. Mark each paragraph against the effective paragraph criteria. Copy and paste this table under your writing in your blog.

Criteria for an Effective Paragraph	Par 1	Par 2	Par 3	Par 4	Par 5
⚈ Start with a topic sentence.	yes
⚈ Have at least 2-3 connected sentences.	yes
⚈ Have sentences that are effective that have varied beginnings	no
b.  have juicy vocab e.g action/describing  words	yes
(c) grammatically correct	yes
(d) punctuated correctly.	no
(Think of 1 or 2 things that you need to to focus on next time, to make sure your paragraphs are effective.)
Next time I  need to have sentence that are effective

My Motat Writing

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